04-11-2013, 04:30 AM
I often am by sadness overtaken.
When I about this world ponder and reckon.
Wherever I see , there're bloodsheds and fights.
People being deprived of their basic rights.
The sky once blue is with blood now red
People's mind with hatred and poison fed.
The hearts are now harder than stone
Is there none who feels and care?
For the opressed are despaired and alone
Is there none who'll their pain share.
I wish for a day when I would see
The world , all peaceful and fight free
A day when barracks will be covered with dust
All swords and weapons eaten up by Rust.
Let's make peace and let's not fight
Let's not be divided and let's unite!
needed feedback for the above poem! It is the first one I ever made!
When I about this world ponder and reckon.
Wherever I see , there're bloodsheds and fights.
People being deprived of their basic rights.
The sky once blue is with blood now red
People's mind with hatred and poison fed.
The hearts are now harder than stone
Is there none who feels and care?
For the opressed are despaired and alone
Is there none who'll their pain share.
I wish for a day when I would see
The world , all peaceful and fight free
A day when barracks will be covered with dust
All swords and weapons eaten up by Rust.
Let's make peace and let's not fight
Let's not be divided and let's unite!
needed feedback for the above poem! It is the first one I ever made!