Takes too long to breathe

[heslopian]

If you blinked
you'd pass it,
but Danny knew that

Danny was a fool,
he would sing to me
at little river, just after Is "little river" a place, like Lake Titicaca? If so I think it should be capitalised.
the washboard

He was damaged and laughed
in the drunk man's grapes When using the possessive context you need an apostrophe.
we ran through to get there

The stars
would stay out all night for us
at truck stop and foxtail;
walking upside down across the sky

We hit it too hard
at little river, his eyes
went fix and swilled over me

We set the sky ablaze in orange and red,
white hot
across the fields at foxtail

I blinked,
but Danny knew that

I chase his embers in my dreams, like fireflies This is my favourite line. It's soft and subtle, yet deeply poignant.
but I didn't know
I would hate him so much
for washing up at little river

A very moving poem, with some elegant and powerful phrasing; I like that you hint at rather than explain the action. I don't like the use of sporadic commas in poems which don't consistently use punctuation, but that's just a personal nit. Critique is JMHO; thank you for the read.