04-06-2013, 05:15 AM
Ahh, sorry, I see what you mean now! I was kind of attempting a bit of a reveal - an answer to the "why?" of the poem between the second and third stanzas - where it goes:
Why you? They asked me.
Why tell you?
I said, I only asked,
You know,
Not that.
I only asked to know,
Not that.
She's young, a son,
I asked.
Again, there's a lot of ambiguity there - which was intentional, but which now I'm a bit conflicted about. Do you have any ideas for how I should make it clearer?
Why you? They asked me.
Why tell you?
I said, I only asked,
You know,
Not that.
I only asked to know,
Not that.
She's young, a son,
I asked.
Again, there's a lot of ambiguity there - which was intentional, but which now I'm a bit conflicted about. Do you have any ideas for how I should make it clearer?