04-06-2013, 01:02 AM
You might be right. I wanted to poem to echo my own confusion and bewilderment at the event I'm describing. I went with the fragmented speech for a similar reason. I wanted confusion, and almost a sense of nausea at the seasickness of the poem.
Perhaps people will be better able to help me clarify if I explain the story I'm thinking of.
Basically, I was at work the other day, and a girl - about 22 - mentioned her five year old son. One of the male servers (rudely) asked if her child was planned, and she said, no, actually, it had been rape. Though people were polite to her face, the response behind her back was "how could she say such an awful thing?! Poor man! How could she have said it to him?!" And I was obviously very upset by this response.
The thing is, the idea behind that kind of thinking is that rape must never be mentioned - that it's a kind of violation to force someone to realise it exists. So I didn't want to mention it explicitly in the poem... I just wanted to evoke the nausea, and the fragmented, irrational and confused thinking behind such a response... So any ideas in relation to that?
Perhaps people will be better able to help me clarify if I explain the story I'm thinking of.
Basically, I was at work the other day, and a girl - about 22 - mentioned her five year old son. One of the male servers (rudely) asked if her child was planned, and she said, no, actually, it had been rape. Though people were polite to her face, the response behind her back was "how could she say such an awful thing?! Poor man! How could she have said it to him?!" And I was obviously very upset by this response.
The thing is, the idea behind that kind of thinking is that rape must never be mentioned - that it's a kind of violation to force someone to realise it exists. So I didn't want to mention it explicitly in the poem... I just wanted to evoke the nausea, and the fragmented, irrational and confused thinking behind such a response... So any ideas in relation to that?