Privilege

[cantab]

I like the repetition in this. It does a good job of fragmenting the sense, and is helped by the short lines, and rhetorial questions. Also, the descriptions of the clothes are effective because they're simple and concrete. I have to confess though, I'm not sure what the poem is talking about. Perhaps that's a flaw in my reading, but perhaps also, you're asking the reader to do a bit too much work, and not giving them enough in return in terms of concrete descriptions and musicality.