I am unproductive

[billy]

the poem feels weak, i think it's because it feels to blasé it should feel real, not a manufactured poem which of course all poems are.

use of images often help lift poems.

i am uninspired
like a brick
an absent-minded brick...

take out any wasted words that do nothing.

worked right you can come up with some ierd and wonderful images to make sort of poem rock

"I am unproductive"

I want to do something great,
but I'm tired
I wish I had motivation to create,
but I'm absent-minded

My mind is a think tank
Racking up ideas
I try to let them bleed to paper
But these pages remain blank

I often worry that soon it'll be too late,
My prime will pass with no climax,
I'll be left with thoughts that devastate
Nothing to show for my hours spent

I got a script,
The doc said it would help,
It's done no good,
I'm simply ill-equipped