Stay Away From Tover's Gate
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No criticism as such... it has the beginnings of a good childrens' book

I just wonder why you dropped the rhyme in these lines:

(03-21-2013, 10:55 AM)joshuacan Wrote:  Upon the stars and crescent moon,
Little Jim walked through the house,
I tripped over that one.
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Stay Away From Tover's Gate - by joshuacan - 03-21-2013, 10:55 AM
RE: Stay Away From Tover's Gate - by NakedBear - 03-21-2013, 12:59 PM
RE: Stay Away From Tover's Gate - by FragileHeart - 03-27-2013, 05:29 AM
RE: Stay Away From Tover's Gate - by Crepuscule - 03-27-2013, 11:53 PM



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