potter's wheel

[tectak]

Potter's Wheel
(Creation)

What fool would leave creation up to me, Perfect rhetorical question...hugely unanswerable in Newtonian terms. Excellent.
to force my thumbs and palms across the palette? The palette? Seems strangely misplaced. Potter-palette? Hmmmm
If creation wavers in the make
I'll choose the mallet, Got it. Had me scoring for a moment. Bugger
pound the crumble, sweep away the scree There is a false penultimacy here, ephasised by the line break and lack of punctuation. For me, there should not be. Why the break?

then spatula and slurry, slake
the wheel, then spatula again and nothing grips. Imagery master class

There is a marvel in the roll of blunger drips. A fine line...between jargon and jeopardy...I had to look up blunger but I still don't get the drips.
What hand formed these oily hills and what's beneath?"What hand" has the drama, but we want to know "whose"hand...and as it is certainly a hand that formed, perhaps for meter's sake we you could drop the hand in favour of " Who formed these oily hills and what's beneath?"
I could try again or take a break
or taste the clay dust on my teeth. Are we in an either/or situation here? ...or take a break to sluice the clay dust from my teeth.

milo *(this was originally a 'study' done for a section of a larger poem but to me it seems to hold its own weight.)

You do make it difficult. The nits in this need a fine comb. I struggle to find them , not because they are hidden, but because they are few. Solid enough...I would say if it wasn't.
Very best,
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