Sedate

[saeity]

Hi Rodthegod, I must admit I took one look at the length of this and nearly ran the other way, read the first two lines aloud, can you hear the internal rhythm, if you decide to rhyme a piece you need to have meter, the first two lines are fine hope this helps

So allow yourself to unwind and take a load off your mind,
my words sedate your soul and let you know you'll be just fine.
My hypothesis is life was made to challenge your strength
It could be my imagination but the bullshit feels like weights,

saeity.