03-20-2013, 05:08 AM
Wow, thanks! I really love the input.. I made this revision based on what you said, I hope its in the right direction
My Name (new name of poem)
Sadness is not my name
Yet I was born with
Similar pain ~ under
Her placenta came my
New fame.
Hate is the
Opinion of giants,
Monsters roaming &
Storming my head.
Why
Must the sky
Dawdle when we all
Need to need?
Bent
Over me and handcuffed.
Lime and scum
Rubbing off threats
Screaming / dreaming
No one is left.
Escape
Is the fate of scientists.
For all the rest, it is a mystery.
My Name (new name of poem)
Sadness is not my name
Yet I was born with
Similar pain ~ under
Her placenta came my
New fame.
Hate is the
Opinion of giants,
Monsters roaming &
Storming my head.
Why
Must the sky
Dawdle when we all
Need to need?
Bent
Over me and handcuffed.
Lime and scum
Rubbing off threats
Screaming / dreaming
No one is left.
Escape
Is the fate of scientists.
For all the rest, it is a mystery.
...(s)he has trouble acting normal when she's nervous
Poetry in motion, played out in the mind of madness
Poetry in motion, played out in the mind of madness

