Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle
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I think the sucicent nature of your poem is critical to the whole of the poem. It creates a fragment of thought, and makes it solid..

I really like
"the moon is blown from her lips in blue smoke"

maybe use like instead of in the?
...(s)he has trouble acting normal when she's nervous

Poetry in motion, played out in the mind of madness
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Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-12-2013, 01:01 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Leanne - 03-12-2013, 03:45 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by brandontoh - 03-12-2013, 06:14 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by billy - 03-12-2013, 10:39 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Bloggsworth - 03-12-2013, 11:04 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-12-2013, 11:27 PM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by tectak - 03-13-2013, 01:15 AM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by serge gurkski - 03-15-2013, 01:19 AM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-13-2013, 01:26 AM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Heartafire - 03-14-2013, 03:11 AM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-14-2013, 03:48 AM
RE: Moon Woman Cuts the Circle - by tectak - 03-15-2013, 12:24 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by Leanne - 03-15-2013, 04:16 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by tectak - 03-15-2013, 06:21 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by saeity - 03-15-2013, 05:50 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by milo - 03-16-2013, 11:33 PM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-17-2013, 11:11 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by softlyfalling - 03-18-2013, 11:44 AM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-18-2013, 12:14 PM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by UnofficiallyMe - 03-19-2013, 11:52 PM
RE: Moon-Woman Cuts the Circle - by Todd - 03-20-2013, 04:08 AM



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