03-19-2013, 11:52 PM
I think the sucicent nature of your poem is critical to the whole of the poem. It creates a fragment of thought, and makes it solid..
I really like
"the moon is blown from her lips in blue smoke"
maybe use like instead of in the?
I really like
"the moon is blown from her lips in blue smoke"
maybe use like instead of in the?
...(s)he has trouble acting normal when she's nervous
Poetry in motion, played out in the mind of madness
Poetry in motion, played out in the mind of madness

