Contrast

[milo]

Contrast

I
am pale as the moon
tinted with peonies.

pale as the moon is cliche
tinted with peonies is nice.

You
are soft lunar eclipse,
a bright embrace of shadow
arousing the stars.

soft lunar eclipse is good.
bright embrace of shadow doesn't really work logically as it is very difficult to envision.


We
are limbs intertwining-
a tangle of branches,
paper birch and wild cherry,

this is a nice line

that cast shadows on snow
even in the dark
Visible with eyes shut tight-

Love is blind.

"cast shadows" "eyes shut tight" "love is blind" all very familiar.
the single word lines may work for others but not really for me.

thank you for sharing.

milo