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[Todd]

Hi Amy,

I don't often say this, but I like your love poem. You even managed to sell the cliche at the end to me. Here are some comments:

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I
am pale as the moon
tinted with peonies.--again you flirt with cliche which is appropriate for love poems only to save the image with the peonies.

You
are soft lunar eclipse,
a bright embrace of shadow--bright is a good addition here especially given your title.
arousing the stars.

We--these strophe openings work well. I like the added length here as the joined couple has more substance
are limbs intertwining-
a tangle of branches,
paper birch and wild cherry,--lovely
that cast shadows on snow--how you have it is correct, but I still think I'd prefer seeing you shorten this line to simply "shadows on snow"
even in the dark
Visible with eyes shut tight---need some punctuation or the capitalization seems off

Love is blind.

Again no big nits. Much enjoyed.

Best,

Todd