03-12-2013, 03:45 PM
This has a beautifully organic feel to it, almost pantheistic. The inversion of natural orders, such as the moon originating in smoke rather than smoke covering the moon, centres the entire universe on this one old woman. Specifically blue smoke reminds me of the Cailleach, but that's just an association I'm prone to make given where my interests lie -- when I couple that with the crone, I get an essential rebirth image. After all, the threefold goddess was and will be young and beautiful.
The visual image of a moon hanging in mist above a still lake is exquisite, especially when one adds in an old woman looking backwards to her morning. It's lovely, Todd, and I don't think I can suggest a single change.
The visual image of a moon hanging in mist above a still lake is exquisite, especially when one adds in an old woman looking backwards to her morning. It's lovely, Todd, and I don't think I can suggest a single change.
It could be worse