Help on what i need to improve on im a 16 year old boy who enjoys free writing poetry

[hkohl15]

I'm a newbie to advice and commenting, but its a very good start for a poem. The reader can feel your emotion. However, it is still very "raw" if that makes sense, and could use more editing. For example, some words especially are informal - such as your use of the word "stuff" or "good enough" (which is used twice) These distract the reader from the point and make them focus on these words. Hope this helps!