Help on what i need to improve on im a 16 year old boy who enjoys free writing poetry
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I do like your poem, there seems to be alot of hurt feelings in it.
To improve it, maybe take out stuff and replace it with something more defined and specific.
The last two lines repeat wind, maybe put breeze? Breeze is light to the sound.
For anyone with a broken heart, there would be a connection.
By the way, you are good enough for everyone and if they make you feel like you don't measure up, they are who is not good enough.
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Help on what i need to improve on im a 16 year old boy who enjoys free writing poetry - by _nothinglastsforeverbutlove_ - 03-07-2013, 11:56 PM
RE: Help on what i need to improve on - by Claire - 03-11-2013, 06:30 AM
RE: Help on what i need to improve on - by hkohl15 - 03-12-2013, 01:10 AM
RE: Help on what i need to improve on - by billy - 03-12-2013, 01:22 AM



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