03-11-2013, 05:36 AM
I think there is some repitition you could pull out like wine, me, and mine. In the beginning when you wrote wrong twice in a stanza it seemed a little redundant. Overall the poem was upbeat(:
p.s. It's interesting that you are writing poems in a language you aren't native to, I wish i could do that with Spanish!
p.s. It's interesting that you are writing poems in a language you aren't native to, I wish i could do that with Spanish!