Beyond Reach

[cidermaid]

Hi, this is a nice effort with good use of images to hold the readers attention, but I found it a bit flat to read. I think that perhaps you need to work on the flow and metre of the poem to give it that extra lift & life. A Slant rhyme or perhaps some other poetic device like some alliteration might be worth considering.
As they say the choice is yours...but be encouraged I think this has plenty of potential.
Thanks for sharing. AJ