02-25-2013, 11:50 PM
The poems are always so clever. This one, and some of the others are more subtle, and I like them better. I'm sure you work hard on your poetry, but it comes to the point where it just seems too easy for you. And that's a good thing, people will think they can do it because you make it seem so easy, then they fail miserably.
I never went to college, and I don't know anybody that's educated, so I'm not afraid of sounding pretentious: and I'd like to see you write a few moody, dense and obscure-ish super-serious poems. I would just be interested. Not to say that I haven't read some serious poems from you, it's just that there's usually some clever wittiness sneaking up through everything you write. And that's you, there's nothing wrong with how you do things, despite what those smug professors and people on other poetry sites have said in the past....But as one of those depressing, woe is me, life is shit kind of people myself, I'm simply waiting for that verbose, existential side of you to forget the balance and knock me out with some uber-serious, hard to understand statements on society and reality. Maybe could stick it in the Poems For Fun section.
I never went to college, and I don't know anybody that's educated, so I'm not afraid of sounding pretentious: and I'd like to see you write a few moody, dense and obscure-ish super-serious poems. I would just be interested. Not to say that I haven't read some serious poems from you, it's just that there's usually some clever wittiness sneaking up through everything you write. And that's you, there's nothing wrong with how you do things, despite what those smug professors and people on other poetry sites have said in the past....But as one of those depressing, woe is me, life is shit kind of people myself, I'm simply waiting for that verbose, existential side of you to forget the balance and knock me out with some uber-serious, hard to understand statements on society and reality. Maybe could stick it in the Poems For Fun section.