Solitude

[tectak]

Edit I

It is shallow here beneath the pull of temporal binding
where suns rise and set between one another

Pebble thoughts glance across reflected shadows I am immediately forced into the complex worlds created by the split personality. This seems to be ID-en thinking! To italicise is to seperate....I am convinced that we have an internal conversation here and would like more of it.....why did you stop so soon? Aha! You ran out of things to say!

No good can come of words
that are not whispered

and flesh melts against bone
to drown in sediment and silence
against your pillow I am not confused by the use of "your" but really, really need MORE to complete my understanding. Left as it is you leave me wanting....is that your intention? If it is, then result
I would,though, take heed of the humble critic......but ignore me
Best,
tectak

Original

It is shallow here beneath the pull of temporal binding
where suns rise and set between one another
and flesh melts against bone

Pebble thoughts glance across reflected shadows
to drown in sediment and silence

No good can come of words
that are not whispered
against your pillow