Hi twoneight, I realize you're new to the site so I made some changes to your two valentine threads. When you have an edit that you've done, in general unless a lot of time has passed (at least a month or two) its best to place the edits in the same thread. Notice what I did to your first post. It allows people to chart the progress of the poem without having multiple threads cluttering up the page. I'm including a link for a tutorial Mark put together which goes into more detail. We're glad you're here posting your poems. Remember to give feedback to others who would appreciate the same help from you that you're receiving.
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http://pigpenpoetry.com/Thread-Poetry-Revisions
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http://pigpenpoetry.com/Thread-Poetry-Revisions
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson