Monsoon Song

Monsoon Song

lolo

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02-09-2013, 10:33 PM

(02-09-2013, 02:57 AM)Heartafire Wrote: Hi lolo, I am blown away by this. Written beautifully, powerful and solid. Would like to find a nit but, damn, it is just an amazing read.
I agree with Todd re "wearily". I appreciate the alliteration it lends on that line but think it flows more evenly without it. Lookiing forward to reading more of your work.
Heart

Thanks Heartafire, for your lovely comment.

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Monsoon Song - by lolo - 02-08-2013, 06:14 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by billy - 02-08-2013, 06:32 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by lolo - 02-08-2013, 08:01 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by Mr. Shankly - 02-08-2013, 08:25 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by heslopian - 02-08-2013, 09:47 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by lolo - 02-08-2013, 11:40 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by Todd - 02-08-2013, 11:43 PM

RE: Monsoon Song - by lolo - 02-09-2013, 01:05 AM

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