Pain makes people change.

[billy]

hi news. despite the title (which works well) it'sa cheeky little write, it has the feel of a long term relationship and a one nighter. nothing major, just a couple of nits that really are nit. it does feel like you wrote it while being banged (in places) and i'm not sure if it's a good or bad thing. the whole e part gave me alaugh so perhaps it's a good thing.

thanks for the read

Hey,

My lips still burn from your kisses verges on cliche
and they burn with questions

you were fire in the air I breathed
and fire were the hands that clasped my thigh should it be fire was the hands...
my waist, tight

eye to [moan] this made smile, maybe a small rephrase keep the brackets though cos they enhance the moan.
you consumed me
whole e-
hell.

I need your grin
Your eyes closed, neck back
Fingers tip, tap, dancing on my skin

I…

laugh at the jelly in your hair,
awakened groans

I…

pounce on weathered parts
ask for the attention
I’ll never get