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Pain makes people change.
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02-04-2013, 02:55 PM
Oh wow, I really like this. The imagery is strong, and the word choices are good. If I were to nitpick, I'd say I don't know what 'jell yin your hair' mean. Not sure why you use 'weathered' in the last stanza too. Not much else to say, really. It's unique and a really enjoyable read!
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Pain makes people change. - by newsclippings - 02-04-2013, 02:42 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by brandontoh - 02-04-2013, 02:55 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by newsclippings - 02-04-2013, 02:58 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by brandontoh - 02-04-2013, 03:00 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by newsclippings - 02-04-2013, 03:07 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by billy - 02-04-2013, 03:36 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by Jae Mc Donnell - 02-04-2013, 05:17 PM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by newsclippings - 02-05-2013, 08:55 AM
RE: Pain makes people change. - by AisforApple - 02-05-2013, 11:08 AM
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