02-01-2013, 11:04 PM
So it works, in the moment.
It has the feeling of something I'd like ok when I read it, then not read it again. But that's me.
It's hard to critique, because I do like it as it is. Yet it isn't very memorable, despite some comparisons to craters and "Exit" signs that I can relate to.
If anything, maybe a revision of everything after "from M to E". But again, that's just me. I lose interest after that point. I lose interest in the images, not that they're bad.
You can just try some different things out, see what happens. It's not too bad as it is. It's something my opinion would change a lot about from time to time.
It has the feeling of something I'd like ok when I read it, then not read it again. But that's me.
It's hard to critique, because I do like it as it is. Yet it isn't very memorable, despite some comparisons to craters and "Exit" signs that I can relate to.
If anything, maybe a revision of everything after "from M to E". But again, that's just me. I lose interest after that point. I lose interest in the images, not that they're bad.
You can just try some different things out, see what happens. It's not too bad as it is. It's something my opinion would change a lot about from time to time.