01-31-2013, 09:24 AM
Hi AisforApple,
I found this to be quirky while remaining 'cute' throughout. Your approach is original and at times you completely consumed me with your words. About three-quarters of the way through (when you start loving everything :p ) I felt a little like some of that was filler . . . although the ending line seems to have a personal ring to it and works with that repetition, it was the content of the 'love' list that I found a bit tedious.
Overall the reading of this poem gave me that 'feel-good' vibe and it really takes me to another place. In some ways I draw comparison's between this work and a song called 'Meet Virginia' in which the singer describes a very interesting-sounding woman who he shares a vague relationship with. I am certain that this entire paragraph will be unuseful to you as I have caught myself rambling.
Thanks for sharing
I found this to be quirky while remaining 'cute' throughout. Your approach is original and at times you completely consumed me with your words. About three-quarters of the way through (when you start loving everything :p ) I felt a little like some of that was filler . . . although the ending line seems to have a personal ring to it and works with that repetition, it was the content of the 'love' list that I found a bit tedious.
Overall the reading of this poem gave me that 'feel-good' vibe and it really takes me to another place. In some ways I draw comparison's between this work and a song called 'Meet Virginia' in which the singer describes a very interesting-sounding woman who he shares a vague relationship with. I am certain that this entire paragraph will be unuseful to you as I have caught myself rambling.
Thanks for sharing