Flood

[unknown]

Numb eyes strangle tears
Choking on crystals minus six degrees.
The world is seen so coldly.
Neural fires spark explosion of atomic bombs in the mind.
It is not enough heat to thaw.

Sight and perception live on the same body
In the same region
In the Northern hemisphere,
and peace cannot be made.

Anger fuels the fire for war in the dome.
Sadness freezes blank eyes.

When winter and fire unify
No strength can shield the pressure of the waterfall.

The rocks are not round.
The beginning of the flood will feel lonely.
Know you are not.

[brandontoh]

I can see that you're trying to introduce some imageries, but the word choices are kind of weak. The idea itself is neat and really interesting, so you can try to replace words like 'minus six degrees', 'atomic bombs', and 'sadness freezes the eyes'. Those in my opinion can be improved rather simply. I'd go into a lot more detail, but I'm too tired at the moment. Good effort though, and thanks for the read. Hope I'm of help. =)

[AisforApple]

"The beginning of the flood will feel lonely" < I love, love, LOVE this. And I really like the "Fire and Ice" motif going on.

My only advice for the poem as a whole would be to simplify your imagery...there's a lot going on, and your word choice is beautiful, just very elaborate for as short as your stanzas are. You have a lot of very strong words, but there's so many of them that the impact of their meaning gets a little lost.