01-26-2013, 10:49 AM
Our individual everything’s
are infinite and insignificant;
This works somewhat, as you have it. You could have
'Our individual everything
is infinite and insignificant'
or just put 'everythings'. I know people put 's on things that usually don't have s at the end, but people are used to seeing everything's meaning everything is: so it might get confusing. But you decide.
a blade of grass that looms large above an ant.
The golden age of capitalism was beat,
Kerouac’s dying dream floods the sinking streets.
While seven billion poets fill the air with words now spoken,
maybe lose the comma here
for only the ten trillionth time.
A long campaign with no reward;
no fat pay cheque, or love restored.
Life’s mundane nature now a perfect fit,
the comma here too could be dropped
for those of us content to quit.
The tired soldier smiles as the bullet hits.
Has he found what he was looking for?
are infinite and insignificant;
This works somewhat, as you have it. You could have
'Our individual everything
is infinite and insignificant'
or just put 'everythings'. I know people put 's on things that usually don't have s at the end, but people are used to seeing everything's meaning everything is: so it might get confusing. But you decide.
a blade of grass that looms large above an ant.
The golden age of capitalism was beat,
Kerouac’s dying dream floods the sinking streets.
While seven billion poets fill the air with words now spoken,
maybe lose the comma here
for only the ten trillionth time.
A long campaign with no reward;
no fat pay cheque, or love restored.
Life’s mundane nature now a perfect fit,
the comma here too could be dropped
for those of us content to quit.
The tired soldier smiles as the bullet hits.
Has he found what he was looking for?