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Chosen like fresh market fruit,
Kicked from the field by careless boots,
Already bruised on one side,
Pumped full up with pill popping pesticides.
I love the imagery in this last line!

Don’t you know you’re not allowed to
Entertain voices in heads?
Shouldn’t you most definitely be dead?
It is a bit awkward. Well, a lot awkward in my opinion. "To" is not really a word to end a line with, in my opinion. It creates a broken thought, where the reader must search for the word that "to" is referring to
and that is difficult for someone to
do, if you catch my drift. It's just something to be careful of in poetry. In some cases, it doesn't matter, especially if the poem is consisting of broken thought. Yours, however, primarily composed of whole and coherent thoughts on each line. It breaks step, like a stumbling soldier.

I don't like rhyming much, to be honest. It greatly limits the potential diction of the poet. And diction is what makes these things good! "Rhythm over rhyme," that's what I say.


Speaking from limited, but existing, experience with graphics I agree your picture is a bit distracting, but probably not for the same reason Rowen here has (though I wouldn't disagree). The blue is a bit strong so you may want to tone it down, or maybe add a conflicting color, and it might be a bit better. Best to just tone the blue town a touch though.