01-16-2013, 01:23 AM
Thank you very much for your consructive critique. I read a view of your comments on other poems in this forum before, and I liked how you took everything apart and offered some actual inspirational thoughts.
Especially your suggestion to put a rather rhythmic line in the stanza is a great idea! I will rewrite as soon as I have time.
I didn't have a view transition in the first place, but nobody figured out the woman was blind. I will try again though.
So thank you!
strawhatted
Especially your suggestion to put a rather rhythmic line in the stanza is a great idea! I will rewrite as soon as I have time.
I didn't have a view transition in the first place, but nobody figured out the woman was blind. I will try again though.
So thank you!
strawhatted