01-15-2013, 03:29 AM
Hi Kieth,
really enjoyed this read... comfortable and comforting in the images and pictures that it brought to mind, sort of felt like a lazy weekend reminisce with some old friends, whilst wearing a boyfriend jumper and stoking the fire. (Mine's a pint of Guinness please!)
No real nits as such, perhaps a couple of the lines feel a bit over long and might benifit from a tweek.
In St1 L2 is it possible to work out a contaction with Could and have.
and in St4 L2 perhaps crossing when the gushing slows.
AJ
really enjoyed this read... comfortable and comforting in the images and pictures that it brought to mind, sort of felt like a lazy weekend reminisce with some old friends, whilst wearing a boyfriend jumper and stoking the fire. (Mine's a pint of Guinness please!)
No real nits as such, perhaps a couple of the lines feel a bit over long and might benifit from a tweek.
In St1 L2 is it possible to work out a contaction with Could and have.
and in St4 L2 perhaps crossing when the gushing slows.
AJ