01-14-2013, 10:09 PM
Almost every line in this could be the subject of one poem. Maybe you're going too fast. You make good points, then you just go to another and then another. But that is the way of society, for younger people especially. Each day is a high velocity mumble.
Still if you concentrated on one of these topics, and built a poem out of it, that might be helpful:
Strive for perfection
Still accept mediocrity
Try so hard, not to conform
Yet even hipsters have a norm
Pursuit of passions, makes jealous desires
This world sells hope, makes overzealous buyers
Still if you concentrated on one of these topics, and built a poem out of it, that might be helpful:
Strive for perfection
Still accept mediocrity
Try so hard, not to conform
Yet even hipsters have a norm
Pursuit of passions, makes jealous desires
This world sells hope, makes overzealous buyers