People, places and things.

[earlymorningnoises]

the people, the places and things
that you miss when your're too busy being young
all the girlfriends become regrets
when you're lonley and finsihed growing up

and its a hard line you have to draw
when you are drunk and tired
who you bring in just to cast away
and who do you simply ignore

well i am drunk and tired
and i cant get them out of my mind
all the people and places and things
that i spent a life passing by

and in a new year full of chances
i will start things off on the wrong foot
so much like years before
except that it's a decision this time.

[Arriedo]

i like it. it had a certain flow to it that went really well when i read it. I like the content something that makes you think

[Todd]

Hi Joe, welcome to the site!

I think you have a nice poem here. It might be better with a few cuts and rearrangements. It may be easier to show you what I think the core of your poem is. Here's something to consider below, just a few thoughts on my part:

when you are drunk and tired
all the girlfriends become regrets--great line
when you're lonely and finished growing up

who you bring in just to cast away
and who do you simply ignore

well I am drunk and tired--lower case i's look self conscious mostly
and I cant get them out of my mind
all the people and places and things
that I spent a life passing by

and in a new year full of chances
so much like years before
except that it's a decision this time.

Again look at what I removed. I mostly want you to just reflect on the changes and see why they might be stronger (that is if you agree). I'm not saying to make them verbatim. It's just easier to show you what I mean, and in novice I don't want to hit you with too many comments at once. I hope the view is helpful.

Best,

Todd

[earlymorningnoises]

Thanks for the compliments and advice. I am really trying to trim down on words while keeping the content alive.