01-11-2013, 09:54 PM
I guess the whole point of this piece is 'who is he?'
To work out the riddle I need clues and as I'm not especially clever the clues need to be simple.
As N uses "us" throughout S1 I'd have thought the inferences would be equally true to me as N. I have trouble with all three. He's a bard who lies; does this mean all bards? Are you implying 'artistic licence' is equivalent to telling lies?
I have no conception of 'blinding cries'. 'Cries' doesn't seem strong enough to describe the anguish of being a servant, 'blinding' doesn't modify 'cries' enough for me, mainly because it seems impossible and therefore does nothing.
Having been tricked by him too my impression is of someone I need to be wary of.
The couplet which follows adds little to my solving of the riddle.
Throughout the piece I was reluctant to let the capital H deflect me toward a deity but who else can it be given your choice of words such as 'glorious' and 'rises'?
Then you tell us in your denouement it's actually you!
I bet your girlfriend got it first time!
Overall - i think the piece tries too hard to be mysterious, deep and meaningful - in a poetic way.
A final comment on your opening statement... analysis of a poem and a critique of a poem are different exercises, analysis would require some of the info about you that your g/f has, critiquing just requires the poem, so that's what I've tried to do, limiting myself to content rather than technique.
To work out the riddle I need clues and as I'm not especially clever the clues need to be simple.
As N uses "us" throughout S1 I'd have thought the inferences would be equally true to me as N. I have trouble with all three. He's a bard who lies; does this mean all bards? Are you implying 'artistic licence' is equivalent to telling lies?
I have no conception of 'blinding cries'. 'Cries' doesn't seem strong enough to describe the anguish of being a servant, 'blinding' doesn't modify 'cries' enough for me, mainly because it seems impossible and therefore does nothing.
Having been tricked by him too my impression is of someone I need to be wary of.
The couplet which follows adds little to my solving of the riddle.
Throughout the piece I was reluctant to let the capital H deflect me toward a deity but who else can it be given your choice of words such as 'glorious' and 'rises'?
Then you tell us in your denouement it's actually you!
I bet your girlfriend got it first time!
Overall - i think the piece tries too hard to be mysterious, deep and meaningful - in a poetic way.
A final comment on your opening statement... analysis of a poem and a critique of a poem are different exercises, analysis would require some of the info about you that your g/f has, critiquing just requires the poem, so that's what I've tried to do, limiting myself to content rather than technique.