01-11-2013, 08:13 AM
(12-06-2012, 05:46 PM)benthejack Wrote: Hah!Thanks for your feedback.
Fantastic idea
I loved:
"Change is impossible to avoid.
So, why use your resolution as a defective steroid?"
the linebreak in:
"hoping it will gear
us up for a difference."
is unnecessary, you dont NEED that line to end in rhyme and it threw off my reading quite a lot ("us up for a difference" isn't even half a proper sentence).
I would personally suggest changing that to "hoping it will gear us up towards a difference"
a part from that I liked it.
and
"hoping it will gear
us up for a difference."
was meant to be one sentence. Maybe I should be them on the same line together then, huh? lol
I appreciate it!


