01-09-2013, 11:44 AM
smoking bud, scraping pipes
bumming cigarettes
these words carry some weight. and it's this feeling you need to incorporate throughout the poem if you can. once you get to that stage it becomes easier to manipulate great lines. it's boring i know, but cliche is a bad thing in 99.9% of use
your first 7 lines fall into this category.
i reasonable poem but in need of a overhaul
thanks for the read.
bumming cigarettes
these words carry some weight. and it's this feeling you need to incorporate throughout the poem if you can. once you get to that stage it becomes easier to manipulate great lines. it's boring i know, but cliche is a bad thing in 99.9% of use
your first 7 lines fall into this category.
i reasonable poem but in need of a overhaul
thanks for the read.