feedback please! I've never shown anyone my stuff before

[destiny1313]

Mommy
Will you tell me a story about once upon a time
We'll get lost in a book, get lost in a rhyme

I love it when you read to me
Abandon all our yesterdays, forget about today

Mommy
Will you comfort me, hold me tight
Whisper to my hair that it will be all right

I love it when you hold me
I feel safe
Wrapped in your arms, you plant kisses on my face

Mommy
Will you sing to me about a far off land
With kings and queens and castles by the sand

I love it when you sing to me
Each word warms my heart
I know no matter how far, we'll never be apart

Mommy
Will you lie to me, tell me you're okay
Tell me that tomorrow will be just another day

I love it when you lie to me
And say that you'll be there
I don't have to worry, I don't have to be scared

[Arriedo]

This one touched me. I enjoyed it a lot. It's simple in structure and rhyme but deep in meaning.

[destiny1313]

Thank you!

[Bunny]

this was a real treat to read