12-14-2012, 04:50 PM
Hi,
Liking the edit.
In particular thought the two new lines in S1 were great. Below why I think they work so well.
Per your request, we bagged the blouses,
everything else collected on the landing
in the shadow of a banister learned by hand-- Passing life is but a shadow and we leave only a slight mark behind
bookshelves folded into broken wings, Again another well penned metaphor for a life that was.
plates in plastic mingled with Lladrós,
Liking the edit.
In particular thought the two new lines in S1 were great. Below why I think they work so well.
Per your request, we bagged the blouses,
everything else collected on the landing
in the shadow of a banister learned by hand-- Passing life is but a shadow and we leave only a slight mark behind
bookshelves folded into broken wings, Again another well penned metaphor for a life that was.
plates in plastic mingled with Lladrós,