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[heslopian]

This comment relates to version two. I like the way the poem juxtaposes images of moving and closure with hints at warm memories. It's sad in a subtle way, and reminds me of Home Is So Sad by Philip Larkin. My only quibble is with the last line, which I feel is too literal for such an atmospheric poem. It implies the end of a romantic relationship, which is fine if that's what the poem is about, but I think you have the chance to tap into something more universal. JMHO of course. Thanks for the read.