12-13-2012, 01:07 PM
(12-13-2012, 07:02 AM)Todd Wrote: This is the harp of the world, great opening line. wondered if harp of worlds would be better?i liked how you tied fact/theory to religion but i got a bit lost in the 3rd stanza. wish i could have been of more help
with a song that died before stars would dying work better? or are the vibrating filaments on a corpse?
dimmed, vibrating its tiny filaments,
choices filtered through harmony.
There is no possibility
that does not collapse, ive read this and the line above and i have no idea if it means they do or don'ti love it. i know it says "all possibilities collapse" but i had to think about it
as cancer consumes you
like a thousand hungry worms. great line when used with the next. it does give an image of wormholes
We too burrow
to places thought firm. The Earth
remains hollow,
an apple without core,
our minds scooped clean. this feels cerebral but i'm not sure why
The cycle repeats:
infinity to infinity
world without end, reminds me of my rosary when i was child
as the theologians say--
like the graying sky,
light suffused with darkness,
shadows on a bright mirror.
~~~
Edit: Made some slight edits from Leanne's comments
From Leanne's surrealist exercise here: Thread

i love it. i know it says "all possibilities collapse" but i had to think about it 

