I Almost Forgot

[penguin]

Its been awhile since I've posted anything new, so here it goes..

It's too early
It's so close.
Memory bothers
when life refuses
to appear today.

As dwelling seems - A dwelling makes more sense
so little when it
has exhausted all
it's sentiment. - its sentiment?

It's okay to worry,
to plead for this attention;
when feeling is at a slow pace - nice line
as the world expands.

In every sentence- - I'd prefer something like "In every muted sentence"
mute. Desperate
to hold your hand,
to be allowed-envying
everything that misses you. - "envying everything missing you" would have some ambiguity

Keep your composure.
Inevitable, but he's worthy
for healing but grieving - don't care for this repetition of "but"
as he vanishes and
takes his life with him.

With a nearby grave
as a saving life, saved for him.
Death has a better memory of life, -3 "lifes" in 4 lines is too many
As we push to out live. - not clear to me what you're saying
We forget before the end
and death seems the best remainder. reminder?

So burying cannot be forgotten, - nice line
but memory seems lonely.

Unprepared for forever,
when I didn't feel the ending yet.
I didn't know life until you,
until the end-your end

expecting something more.
This is my only memory,
with regret of not knowing
I forgot to say I love you.

For what it's saying the poem seems very long and could be clearer and more concise.