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The Rape of Intelligence
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12-03-2012, 05:04 PM
A couple of tiny little meter issues, but in limericks the meter is less important than the overall rhythm so these do smooth out on reciting. I'm not super keen on "a mum called Ma", I think that could probably be improved, but I loved the story and think you've done a terrific job marrying poem and title.
It could be worse
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The Rape of Intelligence - by Keith - 12-03-2012, 10:01 AM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by billy - 12-03-2012, 12:43 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by benthejack - 12-03-2012, 01:24 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by Todd - 12-03-2012, 01:25 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by arbil_poieo - 12-03-2012, 01:48 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by Arriedo - 12-03-2012, 02:32 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by Leanne - 12-03-2012, 05:04 PM
RE: The Rape of Intelligence - by Keith - 12-05-2012, 08:06 AM
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