11-27-2012, 11:42 AM
Love the title 
What an enjoyable piece... great re-imagining, and the almost businesslike stiff-upper-lip tone made it surprisingly endearing when the romance shone through. I found a few of the phrases a bit heavy on the tongue ("Slough of sour savoured", though the alliteration is golden) but I think they suit the style of the poem. Nicely done.
What an enjoyable piece... great re-imagining, and the almost businesslike stiff-upper-lip tone made it surprisingly endearing when the romance shone through. I found a few of the phrases a bit heavy on the tongue ("Slough of sour savoured", though the alliteration is golden) but I think they suit the style of the poem. Nicely done.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?