11-25-2012, 10:32 PM
Thanks for the comments. It pains me to say it but my mother-in-law was the source of most of my best poems. Death and dementia are what I do best.
Todd. Ta for the kind words.I'm not sure about the repetition of "sings", I prefer things to flow along. On the other hand the hesitation mirrors her faltering voice.
Cidermaid. Ta. I think your suggestion is a good one. Personally, I'm happy enough to hear what people liked, what they didn't. Anything else is a bonus.
Billy. Ta. You may be right about "hankies".The handkerchief tree is a real tree. I'm more interested in the cadence or the rhythm than I am in adhering to a strict metre. Don't ask me to explain the difference.
Heslopian. Ta. I think Vietnam is just right. My aim is to show the equivalent of a battlezone. Regarding the title, the kindest thing that could have happened to the old girl would have been a quick death before vascular dementia and all the other stuff ravaged her humanity. But she did have the 2 sides to her, right to the end, which is what I've tried to show.
Todd. Ta for the kind words.I'm not sure about the repetition of "sings", I prefer things to flow along. On the other hand the hesitation mirrors her faltering voice.
Cidermaid. Ta. I think your suggestion is a good one. Personally, I'm happy enough to hear what people liked, what they didn't. Anything else is a bonus.
Billy. Ta. You may be right about "hankies".The handkerchief tree is a real tree. I'm more interested in the cadence or the rhythm than I am in adhering to a strict metre. Don't ask me to explain the difference.
Heslopian. Ta. I think Vietnam is just right. My aim is to show the equivalent of a battlezone. Regarding the title, the kindest thing that could have happened to the old girl would have been a quick death before vascular dementia and all the other stuff ravaged her humanity. But she did have the 2 sides to her, right to the end, which is what I've tried to show.
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.