11-24-2012, 04:25 AM
Hi,
I know we are meant to only offer in dept suggestions on this board...but honestly I could not find much to say beyond wow!
I found your poem deeply moving and poignant.
Everything about the choice and placment of words and emotions felt beautifuly in balance and so real they came alive as i read them.
My only (very hesitantly) offered thought would be that perhaps a break of lines to make three stanza after music hall era would have visually balanced the poem for me and as i re-read it I felt a natural break there. (But as i know so very little about poetry I only dare to offer this as a personal preferance)
Thank you for this poem. I thought it was amazing.
I know we are meant to only offer in dept suggestions on this board...but honestly I could not find much to say beyond wow!
I found your poem deeply moving and poignant.
Everything about the choice and placment of words and emotions felt beautifuly in balance and so real they came alive as i read them.
My only (very hesitantly) offered thought would be that perhaps a break of lines to make three stanza after music hall era would have visually balanced the poem for me and as i re-read it I felt a natural break there. (But as i know so very little about poetry I only dare to offer this as a personal preferance)
Thank you for this poem. I thought it was amazing.