11-24-2012, 03:59 AM
next time try opening you mouth :p
is a story already well told a few times an tho i'd normally find this write a bit to 'cutesy' i liked it mostly
would be nice if it went a little deeper IMO maybe of things if you was brave enough to have liked to have said
the imagery wos nice spesh liked the "I risked a surreptitious glance at your reflection
Our reflections smiled back to one another " cool touch
don't have much to say about the away it's written it flowed well an simple to follow..nice poem
is a story already well told a few times an tho i'd normally find this write a bit to 'cutesy' i liked it mostly
would be nice if it went a little deeper IMO maybe of things if you was brave enough to have liked to have said
the imagery wos nice spesh liked the "I risked a surreptitious glance at your reflection
Our reflections smiled back to one another " cool touch
don't have much to say about the away it's written it flowed well an simple to follow..nice poem