11-23-2012, 02:16 PM
Thanks for your kind and helpful feedback, Todd
I thought the parenthesis might be too much as well, but when I took it out it made the first verse seem quite puzzling. Where had they gone on a date if there were too many gays? Would it make much difference if I changed it to "he'd taken her dancing"?
I thought the parenthesis might be too much as well, but when I took it out it made the first verse seem quite puzzling. Where had they gone on a date if there were too many gays? Would it make much difference if I changed it to "he'd taken her dancing"?
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