The Tragedian's Growth

[billy]

"Fine, but too many gays," said dad one evening can this line be split and separated with a white line?
when I asked how a date with my stepmother went
(he'd taken her to a dinner 'n' dancing joint).

His hate was fairly inoffensive;
the kind a lot of men share
as fear and ignorance combine. i think this stanza shows a lot of understanding.

Mine, however, was unforgiving. no need for the 1st comma
In dreams I'd beat and humiliate him,
like a Jacobean climax great simile and funny to boot.
where everyone dies horribly. this stanza plays really well off the 2nd one.

i liked this one jack. nothing but a few nits. i liked how the father was understood but nonetheless hated in the extreme. the simile worked really well with the title in showing how the 1st person came to feel so melodramatic. it also describes some of the pain homosexuals can feel from their own family.

thanks for the read