They sold me a fairey story

[cidermaid]

I'm afraid I don't have much to add to what Todd has written, and I do agree that perhaps there is more in here to explore and work with, but I just wanted to say how well I thought you had captured this, if this is your first draft is is already working well .
You have managed to convey both tender and raw emotion, that any parent will recognise.
A good read that touched me and caused me to think....v topical.
Thanks for the share.