Cyberfriends

[billy]

In the final line, the reference to "plodding bull" and " king of beasts" refer to Taurus and Leo - the respective star signs of the corresspondents.


Her day dawns as mine retires
And mine begins as her’s expires
Of music, life and love she raves
Transmitted by the cyber waves
Her welcome words that flee by night
From server, bounced by satellite
Combined our waking hours involve
The span for Earth to once revolve
Our passions, thoughts, ambitions, fears
Shared in opposing hemispheres

I know her by her words alone
No human form or vocal tone
No pen or paper possible
No medium real and tangible
No touch, no smell nor other sense
To aid a knowing more intense
A missive sent by hand unseen
To form as words upon my screen
But poor procedure to reflect
The truth and scope of intellect

New perceiving she empowers
Amongst her music, books and flowers
The passion, beauty, soaring chords
That speak in richer tones than words
A symphony, the fourth by Mahler meter
Dramatic, moving , melodic gala!meter
In turn I share a work divine
Elgar Enigma variation ninemeter
So share we two Life’s cultural feasts
The plodding the bull and king of beasts!

the content is very good, and the way the two people share and what they share is well stated. the meter is almost good, mainly iambic tetrameter, but if you could tweak a few lines it would flow even better. overall a good insight into cyber friendship. and a good solid set of rhymes.

thanks for the read.